Sentences Read imperative, exclamatory, and interrogative sentences aloud to English learners, using tone to show how these sentences add excitement to writing. Add think-aloud comments to explain how punctuation helps readers understand sentences.
FOCUS/IDEAS Only essential
information for doing a job is included.
ORGANIZATION/PARAGRAPHS
Each rule describes a new aspect of the topic.
VOICE Writing is clear. The writer
shows understanding of how to do a job.
WORD CHOICE The writer uses
strong, precise verbs (straighten, dust) to describe actions.
SENTENCES The writer shows
understanding of commands.
CONVENTIONS There is
excellent control and accuracy, including correct spelling of singular and plural nouns.
Model the Trait
Improve Writing
Prewrite and Draft
Draft and Revise
Connect to Unit Writing
READING-WRITING CONNECTION
A Day's Work tells how a man teaches his grandson the ethics of working with integrity.
The story uses spare dialogue with commands and questions to establish and resolve conflict.
Students will write rules as brief commands.
MODEL SENTENCESDiscuss Writing Transparency 7A. Then discuss the model and the writing trait of sentences.
Each rule is stated as a command. Each command begins with a strong verb and includes only necessary words. For example, Rule 2 states, "Make your bed." To give complete instructions, important details are clearly stated in few words, such as "Pull up the sheet, blanket, and bedspread smoothly." To add anything else would be too much detail for a rule.
Display Writing Transparency 7B. Read the directions and work together to revise wordy sentences.
ELIMINATE WORDINESS Tomorrow we will write rules for getting along.
How can I get from a paragraph summarizing how people get along to a command that summarizes the rule it illustrates? A paragraph describing how my sister and I agreed to trade off days using the video game station could be summed up as "Use the station only on days when it is your turn."
GUIDED WRITINGSome students may need more help eliminating wordiness. Display some wordy sentences from students' writing and have students suggest revisions.
Think of something you learned or figured out how to do that involves a few simple steps. Write the steps in a how-to report. Make sure you provide all the necessary information.
APPLY
A how-to report explains the steps for making or doing something.
Make sure the how-to report is clear and to the point, with no extra words.